> > It's a mutual longing for the solidity, beauty, and intentionality of an analog past.
> and
> > We both live in a constant state of melancholia and yearning for the past.
> The first sentence looks better. At least at first glance.
Hard disagree. I was even surprised at first because I assumed the first sentence would have been the original. Even at first glance, the first sentence is impersonal and meandering. It’s sterile, a generic soup of adverbs.
> > It's a mutual longing for the solidity, beauty, and intentionality of an analog past.
> and
> > We both live in a constant state of melancholia and yearning for the past.
> The first sentence looks better. At least at first glance.
Hard disagree. I was even surprised at first because I assumed the first sentence would have been the original. Even at first glance, the first sentence is impersonal and meandering. It’s sterile, a generic soup of adverbs.